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Thursday, December 19, 2013
Thesis Statement
Prior to the Revolution in 1792; the monarchs of France faced the burden of economic, political, and cultural conflicts.
This is a nice thesis and i really like that you don't say what revolution you're talking about in the beginning because it makes people want to read to find out. I agree with Kyle to change the semicolon to a comma, but i'm not sure about capitalizing "monarchs".
It seems like you really have a good thesis. Short and succinct, and just gets the message across so the reader has to continue in order to understand what you meant by your thesis. Great job!
This seems like a good thesis, but change the semicolon to a comma.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I believe that monarchs might be capitalized since it is specific to France.
ReplyDeleteThis is a nice thesis and i really like that you don't say what revolution you're talking about in the beginning because it makes people want to read to find out. I agree with Kyle to change the semicolon to a comma, but i'm not sure about capitalizing "monarchs".
ReplyDeleteIt seems like you really have a good thesis. Short and succinct, and just gets the message across so the reader has to continue in order to understand what you meant by your thesis. Great job!
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