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Thursday, December 19, 2013
Thesis Statement
Alexander the Great achieved great military success due
to his consolidation of major armies, execution of rivals, and inheritance of
an already existing thriving kingdom.
I agree with Caroline, once you change the second point the statement will be parallel, and I also agree when she says you should use better adjectives.
This is a good sentence, but you need better adjectives and if you are trying to make your points parallel you need to revise the last one.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Caroline, once you change the second point the statement will be parallel, and I also agree when she says you should use better adjectives.
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