Thursday, December 19, 2013

Thesis Statement

Malala Yousafzai courageously spoke out about the Taliban's ban on education even though she was aware of the fate that could result from her actions, which showed that the Taliban felt that women should have no power, obtains less freedom, and should face harsh and unjust punishments.
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3 comments:

  1. AnonymousDecember 19, 2013 at 11:48 AM

    I really like your thesis! The only thing that I think you should change is take out the word "and" and replace it with a comma.

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  2. AnonymousDecember 20, 2013 at 4:56 AM

    I agree with Morgan with the "and", I also really like the thesis statement and with research it will evolve.

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  3. AnonymousDecember 20, 2013 at 5:08 AM

    Good thesis, an additional suggestion would be to replace "felt" with a stronger word, such as "believed".

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